Use long, flowing, multi-clausal sentences that meander, mirroring a mind that is lost or heavy. 6. The "So What?" Factor (Stakes)
Create a discrepancy between what a character says and what they do. A character saying "I’m fine" while crushing a soda can in their hand tells a much more powerful story than a confession of anger. 4. Setting as Emotional Weather The Emotional Craft of Fiction
Use short, choppy sentences. Fragments. Rapid-fire thoughts. multi-clausal sentences that meander
